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Another Inspiration by Alonea Metallium - M

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Midknight, Nov 12, 2005.

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  1. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Nov 12, 2005 #1
    Title- Another Inspiration
    Author- Alonea Metallium
    Rating- M
    Pairing- Harry/Bellatrix
    Summary-Harry is sent to Azkaban for using an unforgivable to only be later kidnapped by Voldie. With the choice to join or die, and no hope of rescue, he joins for his only chance of success, but will he fall into the D.E. ideals?HPBL R for lang.,sex, no lemons.
    Link- http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2282108/1/


    -Slightly OOC Voldemort, but it's one of the fics that've been on my bookmark list and I'm trying to post alot of them today =P Decent read, could be worlds better, but it's not as bad as alot of the fics I've seen lately
     
  2. Lord Ravenclaw

    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    Nov 12, 2005 #2
    This is pretty well done, especially if you compare it to the stories that have been put out as of late.
     
  3. vorenus

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    Jan 5, 2008 #3
    only read the first two chapters but shouldn't this be in azkaban fics?
     
  4. charmega

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    Apr 26, 2008 #4
    I really like this story but alas no update!
     
  5. Seratin

    Seratin Proudmander –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Apr 26, 2008 #5
    Holy useless necro batman! Necroing in the library is acceptable, almost encouraged if you have something constructive to say.

    That is not constructive dickwipe.

    Oh and your sig hurts my eyes.
     
  6. darklordmike

    darklordmike Headmaster

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    Sep 9, 2009 #6
    Whoa, this is one horrifically bad story. The premise is okay (Harry goes to Azkaban for torturing Bellatrix when she comes to Privet Dr. to kidnap him), but the execution is laughable.

    The characterization is, well....here, just take a look at Bella's internal monologue as she prepares to kidnap Harry:

    And here's her thinking after she's captured by Aurors:


    If it's not already obvious that this was written by a barely literate 14-year-old girl, here's her characterization of Dumbledore:
    Still not convinced that the story's composed entirely of fail? Here's Voldemort talking to Harry, after Harry has agreed to become a Death Eater (apparently a loyal one):

    I didn't get as far as the promised Harry/Bella, and I didn't want to. This abomination was thankfully executed by its author over three years ago.

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