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Oneshot Hate and a Stolen Dream by Monday - Naruto

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Hashasheen, Sep 22, 2011.

2.7857100963593/5, 14 votes
  1. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Half-Blood Prince

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    Sep 22, 2011 #1
    Title: Hate and a Stolen Dream
    Author: Monday
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Angst
    DLP Category: Naruto
    Pairing: None
    Summary: In which Team 7 learns just how well Naruto knows Sasuke.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2952093/1/

    Naruto pulls a brilliant mindfuck on Sasuke. Enough said. :awesome
     
  2. Tasoli

    Tasoli Minister of Magic

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    Sep 22, 2011 #2
    Thats not a proper story a snippet at best.

    2.5/5 rolled down to 2 for lazy writing, could be done better
     
  3. Shouldabeenadog

    Shouldabeenadog Headmaster ⭐

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    Sep 22, 2011 #3
    Flat 2/5. Compared to the mindfucks of Nugar, this was lacking severely in subtly. But even in its own right, it just didn't feel like there was enough.
     
  4. Alindrome

    Alindrome A bigger, darker mark DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Sep 22, 2011 #4
    Very short, not particularly creative nor emotion-inducing. 2/5 - gains a point for not being atrocious, loses the rest of them for not being anything much at all.
     
  5. TheWiseTomato

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    Sep 23, 2011 #5
    I liked it. Worked well for its length.

    3.5/5
     
  6. Moridin

    Moridin Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    Sep 23, 2011 #6
    Decent enough, but I don't think it really qualifies as a oneshot, even. A snippet, perhaps. It works well enough as a standalone piece, though, just not of sufficient length to justify a higher rating.

    3.5/5, rounded down.
     
  7. Khazad-Dumb

    Khazad-Dumb Loves the Gay Porn DLP Supporter

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    Sep 25, 2011 #7
    Nothing to say but weak. Not enough story, weak dialogue, no plot. Weak.
     
  8. Bittersweet Freedom

    Bittersweet Freedom Second Year

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    Sep 25, 2011 #8
    I liked it, but it only gets a 3/5 because the length feels too short for something in the library. I almost feel like DLP should have a section just for short one-shots and drabbley stuff.
     
  9. Lungs

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    Oct 1, 2011 #9
    See, it wasn't terrible, but...

    I was disappoint. With the amount of words written, what I expected was something sort of photographic - capturing a moment, an idea, a characterization...

    It was more like a 5-second long youtube video of someone falling out of a tree...
     
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