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Dead Link Thinking Of You by Memento Vivere - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Stalin's Pipe Organs, Jan 17, 2011.

3.4500000476837/5, 20 votes
  1. Stalin's Pipe Organs

    Stalin's Pipe Organs Auror

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    Jan 17, 2011 #1
    Title: Thinking Of You
    Author: Memento Vivere
    Rating: T
    Genre: Tragedy/Horror
    DLP Category: General
    Pairing: none
    Status: Oneshot
    Summary: There's a ghost in the cupboard under the stairs. Aaron Dursley can hear him. AU, abuse implied- not a happy story.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5332570/1/Thinking_Of_You

    Yea I know Dursley abuse is a plot element long disliked by us but it is only ever implied in this fic and not the reason I recc'd it. The angst may also be annoying to some but I felt it worked well here.

    My only beef was

    Harry dying and Dumbledore taking the excuse that Snape took him away. But I guess we can assume that after fact checking this with the man himself, the Dursleys fed Dumbledore an excuse that was far more believable.

    4/5


    Edit by Minion, Dec. 8, 2012
    Dead link is dead. If you know where to find another copy of the story, please inform the library staff.
     
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  2. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Jan 17, 2011 #2
    Harry choosing to be a ghost when he dies is cripplingly stupid.
    2.5/5
     
  3. Jormungandr

    Jormungandr Prisoner

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    Jan 17, 2011 #3
    Agreed. 2/5.
     
  4. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Jan 17, 2011 #4
    The idea itself is fine. It's quite refreshing, actually. Just a look at a possible alternate universe where Harry dies young, while still at the Dursley's.

    In that regard, I see nothing wrong with it. Stalin's beef is also my beef. We can make sandwiches.
     
  5. Galleon

    Galleon DA Member

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    Jan 18, 2011 #5
    It's a nice, short, what-if story. 4/5
     
  6. b0b3rt

    b0b3rt Backtraced

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    Jan 18, 2011 #6
    It's not terrible by any stretch of the imagination. Coming back as a ghost actually makes a lot of sense. Comparable situation with Myrtle, though I suppose his was more violent.
     
  7. Agnostics Puppet

    Agnostics Puppet Professor

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    Jan 18, 2011 #7
    I found that to be oddly... creepy. A good read none the less even if the grammar was simple. Being that it's written from the point of view of a small boy it works though.

    Im pretty sure he starved to death. "Always hungry..."

    4/5
     
  8. b0b3rt

    b0b3rt Backtraced

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    Jan 18, 2011 #8
    :facepalm

    Yeah, I'm not sure how I didn't catch that.
     
  9. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    Jan 18, 2011 #9
    I laughed at ending. While the story was quite silly in plot, the ending made it be quite stupid overall.

    The fact that the story must have happened 20 or so years after Harry died at minimum, Dudley being forced by the plot to kill his family, Dumbledore being too stupid to be able to figure out what happened to Harry, and the war just conveniently at the stage that it would cause the most drama by still having the war just starting.

    I don't see any reason for this to be in the library, but it did cause enough amusement to get a two out of five.
     
  10. Mock Moniker

    Mock Moniker Professor

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    Jan 18, 2011 #10
    2/5

    It's not bad, but it's not good either.
    I really don't have much to say other than it felt kind of pointless reading it. The writing was bland, and so was the concept.

    At least, what was done with it wasn't interesting. I don't have a problem with the premise; it's just
    Dudley kills his family (for no real reason) and the second war starts up
    is the entire story. Add in an extra 2000 words and that's it.
     
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  11. Stalin's Pipe Organs

    Stalin's Pipe Organs Auror

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    Jan 18, 2011 #11
    I don't know. I got the impression that Dudley committed suicide because of his overwhelming guilt. He killed his son because said son was a wizard and his wife just to finish the job.
     
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  12. Mock Moniker

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    Jan 18, 2011 #12
    I can see that I misread Dudley's last words. At first I thought he was talking about Harry being better off, but he's talking about his son.

    See, I figured the author didn't know you had to be magical to see ghosts, because Dudley could see Harry. Given that, Dudley didn't really have a reason to suspect his kid was magical, so I assumed he didn't. I was mistaken.