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Oneshot Who's Polyjuicing Whom? by Lord Jeram - M

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Jeram, Aug 15, 2010.

4.0999999046326/5, 40 votes
  1. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Aug 15, 2010 #1
    Title:Who's Polyjuicing Whom?
    Author: Lord Jeram
    Rating: M
    Genre: Suspense/Mystery
    DLP Category: Time Travel, maybe?
    Pairing: Harry/Hannah/
    Susan
    (spoilers)
    Words: 8,114
    Published: March 21, 2010
    Status: Oneshot (although it may be continued)
    Summary: Hannah and Susan had a plan to capture the heart of Harry Potter. But plans rarely go as anticipated...
    Link:
    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5834601/1/Whos_Polyjuicing_Whom
    http://www.patronuscharm.net/s/341/1/

    This was originally a response to a challenge in the Ginny Kill-Off thread, which is here: https://forums.darklordpotter.net/showpost.php?p=315938&postcount=34

    As it was posted there originally, I didn't even consider posting a duplicate in the WbA section. But I suppose some formal feedback would be nice.

    This was originally planned as a oneshot, although there are some things I could continue on, but it hasn't been a high priority for me.

    Considering this is my story, it would be a bit gauche to rate it myself.


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  2. enembee

    enembee The Nicromancer DLP Supporter

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    Aug 15, 2010 #2
    Definitely 5 star worthy IMO.

    Voting 5/5.
     
  3. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Aug 15, 2010 #3
    Excellently written. 4.5/5
     
  4. Zennith

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    Aug 15, 2010 #4
    Generally well done, a little convoluted seeming though. 4/5
     
  5. Ash

    Ash Moves Like Jagger DLP Supporter

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    Aug 16, 2010 #5
    4.5/5. Rounded up to 5 just for the ending, which took me off guard. That's always a plus :]
     
  6. Khazad-Dumb

    Khazad-Dumb Loves the Gay Porn DLP Supporter

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    Aug 16, 2010 #6
    This was hilarious. 5/5 for ever.
     
  7. Verminard

    Verminard Seventh Year

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    Aug 16, 2010 #7
    Most amusing.
     
  8. Gabrinth

    Gabrinth Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Aug 17, 2010 #8
    I thought a few things were annoying at the beginning, but you made up for it with sheer LOL.

    5/5 from me
     
  9. Rhys

    Rhys High Inquisitor

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    Aug 17, 2010 #9
    A Mindfuck of high order, 5/5
     
  10. Mage

    Mage Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Aug 17, 2010 #10
    Excellent, the beginning felt a little off, but the ending more then made up for it. 4/5 for the awesome twist.
     
  11. Chiron

    Chiron Second Year

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    Aug 21, 2010 #11
    Finally got around to reading this. Most of the time when Ginny or her name was brought up I was laughing. The best part of course was the ending.

    5/5
     
  12. kmfrank

    kmfrank Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Aug 22, 2010 #12
    Yeah, this is a great one-shot. 5/5 from me, Jeram :)
     
  13. Shinysavage

    Shinysavage Madman With A Box ~ Prestige ~ ⭐

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    Aug 22, 2010 #13
    It's well written, but I just didn't find it that funny. Nice idea though. Only real complaint I had - and it's more of a niggle - is that on the ff.net version, there's no distinction between flashbacks and the present, so it was a little confusing when you suddenly launched into one. 3/5