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WIP Harrison and Luna: An Epic Romance by Gatonio - M

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Gatonio, Feb 7, 2010.

1.3333300352097/5, 15 votes
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  1. Sal Paradise

    Sal Paradise Fifth Year

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    Feb 8, 2010 #21
    It's funny as hell, if nothing else.
     
  2. Novera

    Novera Seventh Year

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    Feb 8, 2010 #22
    Best line ever.
     
  3. Silens Cursor

    Silens Cursor The Silencer DLP Supporter

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    Feb 8, 2010 #23
    Get this shit off my DLP. Your writing is atrociously bad, only made worse by pretentiousness. Coupled with imbecilic name changes, this fic is going NOWHERE.

    Burn-with-Hellfire/5
     
  4. LuckyFelix

    LuckyFelix Seventh Year

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    Feb 8, 2010 #24
    Just to answer your question, I assume Vlad is referring to Osman Gazi, the founder of the House of Osman and the Ottoman Empire. At least, thats the only Osman I can think of to have a country named after them.
     
  5. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Feb 9, 2010 #25
    If you don't like this story, that means you've never loved.

    Heartless bastards.
     
    Crownworthy
  6. Darje

    Darje Groundskeeper

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    Feb 9, 2010 #26
    Hot damn! I'm heartless again!

    Dead Mice / 5
     
  7. mike.90

    mike.90 First Year

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    Feb 9, 2010 #27
    It's only one chapter o_O what's wrong with you? Can't you see almost none of the stories in DLP are 1 chapter(unless one shot). Also, why the hell are you posting your story here? If(big IF) someone likes your story (I doubt anyone rational will), they will post it up.

    Give you some tips, even though I am not an author:
    Go back and re-edit all the text, also rename your story. I hate Harry/Luna.
     
  8. Vegemeister

    Vegemeister Seventh Year

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    Feb 9, 2010 #28
    I am not amused.
     
  9. Zilly Sawdust

    Zilly Sawdust High Inquisitor

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    Feb 10, 2010 #29
    1) His name is Harry, not Harrison;
    2) 'nuff said.
     
    Last edited: Feb 10, 2010
  10. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Feb 10, 2010 #30
    Really? Erm...no. 1.5/5 for lack of spelling errors. Fuck a Victorian England on fantasy steroids.
     
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